When I finish “Gimli” and a few other projects I intend to revist “Mass Disappearance.” The primary goal will be to convert it from first person to third person, but also to revise it substantially. Some things I’m unhappy with, some areas that need expanding and a bit of clarity. At least two new characters; Anubis Alpha and Beta; more clarity on the stored passengers; expansion on the mad dash at the end. There were bits that I wanted to be morbid and creepifyin’ that just never lived up to what I saw in my head; I want to try again on those.
But of course I’m looking at it from my own perspective, with is not objective. For those of you who’ve read Mass Disappearance and found it to be at least somewhat enjoyable, what areas do you see that you’d like to see worked on… plot holes, logic problems, “what the hell does that mean”, that sort of thing. Can’t say as I’ll answer all questions (some mysteries presented I intend to keep as mysteries, at least for a while), but if there’s anything clearly stupid, I’d like to fix it.